Unemployment: day 28
The third day, we visited to Biei south of Asahikawa. At first, we drove to Aoi-ike that was a turquoise bleu pond in forest. Although the weather was cloudy, the pond was really beautiful blue.
Next we visited a flower field named Shikisai-no-oka. There were thousand of colorful flowers, and they were grown in strips. As the field located on a hill, the view was widely beautiful.
Now we visited to a shop complex named Bieisenka. We bought local things such as breads, ice cream, and snacks. And then we had a soup curry for lunch at Kizan nearby Biei station. The soup curry was properly spicy and rich flavor. So we enjoyed the lunch.
As we started moving early morning, each spots were less people. So we enjoyed comfortably our trip.
Timetable – Day 3
- 07:10 – Depart for Aoi-ike
- 07:50 – Arrive at the pond and take a walk
- 08:30 – Depart for Shikisai-no-oka
- 08:50 – Arrive at the flower field and explore
- 09:50 – Depart for Bieisenka
- 10:20 – Arrive at the shopping complex and shop
- 11:10 – Arrive at Curry Shop Kizan and have lunch
- 12:00 – Finish lunch and head to a supermarket
- 12:40 – Arrive at ARCS supermarket on the Asahikawa side and shop
- 14:00 – Return to our condominium
Reference
Correct version
On the third day, we visited Biei, which is located to the north of Asahikawa. First, we drove to Aoi-ike, a turquoise-blue pond nestled in the forest. Although the weather was cloudy, the pond was still a stunning shade of blue.
Next, we visited a flower field called Shikisai-no-oka. Thousands of colourful flowers were planted in neatly arranged strips. As the field is situated on a hill, the panoramic view was truly beautiful.
Afterwards, we visited a shopping complex named Bieisenka, where we bought some local products such as bread, ice cream, and snacks. We then had soup curry for lunch at a restaurant called Kizan, located near Biei Station. The soup curry was perfectly spiced and full of flavour, so we really enjoyed our meal.
Since we set off early in the morning, each spot was relatively quiet. This made the whole trip feel relaxed and comfortable.
IELTS Improvement Points
Collocation:
“full of flavour”
→ Common collocation in food descriptions, especially in reviews. “Flavourful” is possible, but “full of flavour” is more natural in British English.
“set off early”
→ A typical travel phrase meaning to begin a journey early. Common in travel writing or speaking.
“nestled in the forest”
→ Descriptive collocation often used in travel literature to describe a natural location peacefully situated in nature.
Template:
“Although [condition], [result].”
→ Useful sentence pattern for expressing contrast. E.g. Although it was cloudy, the view was beautiful.
“We visited [place], where we [did something].”
→ Good for combining information smoothly. E.g. We visited a market, where we bought souvenirs.
“Since we [past action], [result].”
→ Cause-and-effect connector that boosts coherence. E.g. Since we left early, the spots were less crowded.
Vocabulary:
“panoramic view”
→ A wide, scenic view; high-level vocabulary often used in travel or geography contexts.
“relatively quiet”
→ More academic and natural than “less people”; appropriate for IELTS Writing Task 1 or 2.
“shopping complex”
→ More formal and precise than “shop complex”; fits better in formal descriptions or reports.
