Unemployment: day 38
The peaches came my home. These were sent by my older brother living in Fukushima prefecture. He sends peaches in early summer every year. The peaches had ripened and were really sweet. But I prefer less sweet things so I thought that the peaches would be more hard and sour. However my daughter and son enjoyed the sweet peaches.
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Correct version
The peaches arrived at my home. They were sent by my elder brother, who lives in Fukushima Prefecture. He sends peaches every early summer. The peaches had ripened and were really sweet. However, I prefer less sweet food, so I would have liked them to be firmer and slightly sour. Nevertheless, my daughter and son enjoyed the sweet peaches.
IELTS Improvement Points
Collocation:
arrive at my home
→ “come my home” is incorrect. The correct collocation is arrive at my home. The verb arrive requires a preposition such as at.
ripe and sweet / firm and sour
→ Food descriptions often combine texture/condition and taste. Using such natural pairings makes the expression more idiomatic.
Template:
However, I prefer…
→ A common contrast template. It signals a clear shift of opinion, which is useful in essays and speaking.
Nevertheless, … enjoyed…
→ A formal connector meaning “in spite of that”. Good for academic writing to show contrast smoothly.
Vocabulary:
elder brother
→ older brother is fine, but elder brother is more formal and slightly more common in British English.
firmer
→ hard can sound too strong or unnatural for food texture. Firm is the more precise adjective.
slightly
→ More formal and academic than a little. Recommended for IELTS essays and reports.
