Unemployment: day 54
I bought a new laptop. The other laptop that I had used before were handed over my daughter so that she was able to create a program by Scratch on the laptop. The new laptop was second-hand, the spec was below. I got it via Yahoo auction. I thought that it was great deal considering its spec. I recommend the store to buy a second-hand PC.
- Product: dynabook G83/HS
- CPU: Core i5-1135G7
- Memory: 12GB
- Storage: NVMe SSD 256GB
- Display: 13.3inch FHD
- Office: Microsoft Office Pro Plus 2021
- Price: 22,300 yen
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Correct version
I bought a new laptop. The other laptop that I had used previously was handed over to my daughter so that she could create programmes with Scratch on it. The new laptop was second-hand, and its specifications were as follows. I got it via a Yahoo auction. I thought it was a great deal considering its specifications. I recommend the store to buy a second-hand PC.
IELTS Improvement Points
Collocation:
hand over to [someone]
→ Correct form is handed over to my daughter, not handed over my daughter. Always include “to” when transferring possession.
a great deal
→ Idiomatic expression meaning “a very good bargain”. Common in both spoken and written English.
via an auction
→ More precise than “via Yahoo auction”. Correct collocation is “via an auction” or “through an auction site.”
Template:
so that [subject] could [verb]
→ Example: I explained it clearly so that everyone could understand. Useful for showing purpose in IELTS Writing Task 2.
[Subject] was [adjective], and its [noun] were [details].
→ A neat way to describe items formally. Example: The building was old, and its facilities were limited.
Vocabulary:
previously
→ More formal and precise than “before”. Useful in IELTS Writing for academic tone.
second-hand
→ Standard British English for “used” when describing goods. More natural than just “used laptop”.
specifications (specs)
→ Correct technical term instead of “spec”. Always plural when referring to computer performance details.
programme (BrE spelling)
→ In British English, “programme” is used for software or TV shows, while “program” is American spelling. Important for IELTS to show awareness of BrE conventions.
